[ EPU Foyer ] [ Lab and Grill ] [ Bonus Theater!! ] [ Rhetorical Questions ] [ CSRANTronix ] [ GNDN ] [ Subterranean Vault ] [ Discussion Forum ] [ Gun of the Week ]

Eyrie Productions, Unlimited

Subject: "Fragments of a Scrapped Story"     Previous Topic | Next Topic
Printer-friendly copy    
Conferences Undocumented Features General Topic #2211
Reading Topic #2211
Gryphonadmin
Charter Member
18935 posts
Feb-25-14, 11:00 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail Gryphon Click to send private message to Gryphon Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
"Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
 
   I was just looking for something else and ran across a draft file from around 10 years ago. It was originally the setup story for a multiparter, like Manhunt and Star-Crossed would be a few years later, set during Symphony No. 1 but not involving any characters who were part of the Symphony cast at that time. It dead-ended hard and I eventually abandoned the premise it was built on; parts of it would even be superseded by Manhunt (as the existing setup phase contains numerous Secrets references).

I was reminded just now, as I re-read it, that there are some pretty fun bits in here, though, and since the story itself is too specialized to be readily recycled, I think I'll toss a few of the choicer bits in here over the next few days.

In this first one, Kei has turned up at an impromptu-task-force rendezvous with the Intrepid, the "modern-capability starship that looks like a Mk I Connie" special-ops sleeper ship mentioned waaaay back in the ancient WDF Technical Readout (an idea I had 15 or so years before such a thing actually turned up as a playable ship in Star Trek Online), a bit to Gryphon's surprise, as there hasn't been enough time since he put out the call for her to recruit a crew of the size required to operate such a vessel:

	Kei pivoted in the center seat and grinned.
"Weren't expecting to see me, were you?" she asked.
Gryphon laughed. "No, I wasn't at that," he said. "Where'd
you ever find a crew for this old beast on such short notice?"
"Well, all I really had to find was a command staff, and with
everybody hanging around waiting for B5 to be ready, that wasn't
hard," she said, patting a metal box bolted to one arm of the conn.
"Our old friend technology handles the rest." She flipped a toggle
switch on the box, causing a green light to flash, and said briskly,
"M5 terminal link."
A booming metallic voice replied from the conn's intercom
speaker, "M5."
"Ship's status?"
"ALL SYSTEMS OPERATIONAL. ALERT STATUS GREEN. M5 STANDING
BY," the voice replied.
Gryphon blinked.
"You can't be serious," he said at length, but Kei only
grinned.
"M5, system status?"
"M5 MULTITRONIC UNIT FEELING MUCH BETTER NOW," the computer
replied without hesitation.
Kei nodded. "OK, stand by."
"M5," the M5 acknowledged. Kei switched off the interlink
unit.
"M5 and I have an understanding," she said to Gryphon's
continuing baffled look. "It involves him doing what he's told and me
not popping down to Engineering to explain my point of view with an
axe."

--G.
"LOOK, KEI, I CAN SEE YOU'RE REALLY UPSET ABOUT THIS. I HONESTLY THINK YOU OUGHT TO SIT DOWN CALMLY, TAKE A STRESS PILL, AND THINK THINGS OVER."
-><-
Benjamin D. Hutchins, Co-Founder, Editor-in-Chief, & Forum Mod
Eyrie Productions, Unlimited http://www.eyrie-productions.com/
zgryphon at that email service Google has
Ceterum censeo Carthaginem esse delendam.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

  Subject     Author     Message Date     ID  
  RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story TheOtherSean Feb-26-14 1
     RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story mdg1 Feb-26-14 2
         RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story Gryphonadmin Feb-26-14 4
             RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story mdg1 Feb-26-14 6
                 RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story Gryphonadmin Feb-26-14 7
                     RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story Mercutio Feb-26-14 9
  RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story Matrix Dragon Feb-26-14 3
  RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story CdrMike Feb-26-14 5
  RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story Peter Eng Feb-26-14 8
  Fragment the Second Gryphonadmin Feb-28-14 10
     RE: Fragment the Second laudre Feb-28-14 11
     RE: Fragment the Second JeanneHedge Feb-28-14 12
         RE: Fragment the Second Gryphonadmin Feb-28-14 13
             RE: Fragment the Second JeanneHedge Feb-28-14 14
  RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story Zemyla Mar-10-14 15
  Fragment the Third Gryphonadmin Jun-17-17 16
     Fragment the Fourth Gryphonadmin Jun-19-17 19
         RE: Fragment the Fourth Star Ranger4 Jun-19-17 20
         RE: Fragment the Fourth Mercutio Jun-21-17 23
             RE: Fragment the Fourth Gryphonadmin Jun-21-17 24
  RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story McFortner Jun-17-17 17
  RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story Star Ranger4 Jun-19-17 18
  RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story BeardedFerret Jun-20-17 21
     RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story Gryphonadmin Jun-21-17 22
         RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story BeardedFerret Jun-22-17 25
             RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story Peter Eng Jun-22-17 26

Conferences | Topics | Previous Topic | Next Topic
TheOtherSean
Member since Jul-7-08
230 posts
Feb-26-14, 00:27 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail TheOtherSean Click to send private message to TheOtherSean Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
1. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #0
 
   I never thought even Kei would be crazy enough to trust the M5. Hasn't she seen Star Trek?

--
The Other Sean - Don't accept substitutes!
Quis Custodiet Ipsos Custodes?


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
mdg1
Member since Aug-25-04
1171 posts
Feb-26-14, 04:37 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail mdg1 Click to send private message to mdg1 Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
2. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #1
 
   No, but I'm positive Jim Kirk hit on her once.

Mario


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Gryphonadmin
Charter Member
18935 posts
Feb-26-14, 08:49 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail Gryphon Click to send private message to Gryphon Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
4. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #2
 
   >No, but I'm positive Jim Kirk hit on her once.

Poor M5. She still hasn't fully recovered.

--G.
Oh, were you fooled by the booming dude-voice? Only scrap vocabulator they had at the swap meet that day. She's a prototype, you know.
-><-
Benjamin D. Hutchins, Co-Founder, Editor-in-Chief, & Forum Mod
Eyrie Productions, Unlimited http://www.eyrie-productions.com/
zgryphon at that email service Google has
Ceterum censeo Carthaginem esse delendam.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
mdg1
Member since Aug-25-04
1171 posts
Feb-26-14, 11:20 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail mdg1 Click to send private message to mdg1 Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
6. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #4
 
   I was referring to Kei, but your response is funnier. :)

(Although I'm amazed that they couldn't find a Lincoln Enterprises Model One. Those things are EVERYWHERE.)

Mario


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Gryphonadmin
Charter Member
18935 posts
Feb-26-14, 12:04 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail Gryphon Click to send private message to Gryphon Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
7. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #6
 
   >I was referring to Kei,

I am well aware of that, I assure you.

In fairness, I expect Jim has also made at least one pass at Kei, but as we already know, she's partial to Picard. :)

--G.
-><-
Benjamin D. Hutchins, Co-Founder, Editor-in-Chief, & Forum Mod
Eyrie Productions, Unlimited http://www.eyrie-productions.com/
zgryphon at that email service Google has
Ceterum censeo Carthaginem esse delendam.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Mercutio
Member since May-26-13
859 posts
Feb-26-14, 03:57 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail Mercutio Click to send private message to Mercutio Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
9. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #7
 
  
>In fairness, I expect Jim has also made at least one pass at
>Kei, but as we already know, she's partial to Picard. :)

Funny story about me, related to the Trek kick we've been on around here lately...

I thought for about two or three years (I was six when TNG premiered, just for context) that Captain Kirk and Captain Picard were the same person, just that there was one show about when he was a young man and one show when he was much older. I thought this composite captain's name was "Captain Kirk Picard."

It took my first exposure to early-nineties "Kirk vs. Picard" debates for someone to very gently point out to me that, no, they were two different people. Just because both shows said "Star Trek" didn't mean they were the same show.

-Merc
Keep Rat


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Matrix Dragon
Charter Member
1706 posts
Feb-26-14, 06:39 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail Matrix%20Dragon Click to send private message to Matrix%20Dragon Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
3. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #0
 
   There would be less problems with AIs going all Skynet or Ultron if they realized that yes, that woman can and will use a fire axe on you if you deserve it.

Matrix Dragon, J. Random Nutter


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
CdrMike
Member since Feb-20-05
691 posts
Feb-26-14, 09:38 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail CdrMike Click to send private message to CdrMike Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
5. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #0
 
   UF, where a homicidal computer built by the hands of a sociopathic creator can be given a second chance.

--------------------------
CdrMike, Overwatch Reject

"You know, the world could always use more heroes." - Tracer, Overwatch


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Peter Eng
Charter Member
1381 posts
Feb-26-14, 01:55 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail Peter%20Eng Click to send private message to Peter%20Eng Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
8. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #0
 
   > "M5 MULTITRONIC UNIT FEELING MUCH BETTER NOW,"

In my mind, this collided with the phrase, "If You Ain't Get Better, Wasn't No Better to Get," resulting in a multitronic system with a Funkotroni accent.

Peter Eng
--
"SMACKCHAT BE CHEAP, COVENANT-BOY."


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Gryphonadmin
Charter Member
18935 posts
Feb-28-14, 11:46 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail Gryphon Click to send private message to Gryphon Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
10. "Fragment the Second"
In response to message #0
 
   [Gryphon is aboard Concordia as an ad hoc IPSF/WDF mixed task force prepares for a tricky and dangerous joint operation. The Valkyrie update Riker refers to would eventually be moved a few years and repurposed as Project SERAPH BLUE in Rogue Squadron.]

Smiling, Gryphon moved off down the hallway,
following a well-remembered route and hoping the refitters didn't move
any bulkheads around on him.
They hadn't; a leisurely three-minute walk brought him through
a heavy double door into the cool and noisy expanse of the hangar deck.
This, at least, was more or less as he remembered it. The fighters
parked in their revetments were a little newer than the ones that had
been here when he'd last been aboard, but the mechanical noises and
faint scents and contained bustle were the same. The only significant
change was the big banner painted on the aft bulkhead, which read,

WELCOME TO ICE STATION ZEBRA

Gryphon pondered that for a second, got the joke, chuckled to
himself, and then turned to catch the next passing technician.
"Excuse me. Spaceman?"
"Sir?" the dark-haired young woman asked, looking mildly but
not overly flustered to have been hailed by a man wearing the uniform
of a different space force.
"Where can I find General Currier?"
"She's gone aboard the Klingon ship, sir. Discussing close
air support strategies with Colonel Martok in case we get into a
ground battle."
"Ah," said Gryphon, nodding.
"Her adjutant's in the squadron office if you'd like to talk
to him," the technician added helpfully.
"I'll do that. Thank you," he said.
She saluted as though not entirely certain whether she should,
but wanting to show respect. He returned it in the spirit if was
meant, then headed across the hangar to the squadron office.
"They're actually letting you file your own paperwork now?" he
asked the man who sat at the desk in the outer office.
Major W. Thomas "Too Tall" Riker, adjutant to General Patricia
"Terror" Currier and lead pilot of Concordia's second Veritech
squadron, grinned through his neatly trimmed beard and swung himself
to his feet. At six feet four inches tall - two inches above standard
regulation height for a Veritech pilot - he lived up to the nickname
his fellow pilots had bestowed on him in flight school.
Riker thrust out a hand, pumped Gryphon's, and said, "Believe
me, that's one privilege of rank I could do without. Come to take a
look at your force's only tactical strike asset, eh?"
Gryphon laughed. "Don't let my Delta pilots hear you say
that."
"The Delta's a good gunboat," Riker acknowledged, "but if
we're going up against Cylons you're going to be damn glad you've got
our VTs and Dragonflies along."
Gryphon nodded. "I know it, Tom, believe me. But then, there
isn't -any- fight where I wouldn't be damn glad to have this ship's
squadrons flying cover for me." He glanced back over his shoulder,
then said, "I didn't see any Valkyries in the hangar. Don't tell me
Tricia's finally gone to the Thunderbolt."
Riker laughed. "Not a chance. She told me the other day she
thinks the last re-engining program will see the VF-1 to its fifth
century of service. She's got the Eight-Balls on standby up on the
portside flight deck, just in case we get jumped when we cross over.
I'm probably going to standby my squadron on the starboard ramp as
soon as I'm done squaring away my will."
Gryphon arched an eyebrow. Riker shrugged.
"Well, we're going off to help fight a desperate war in a
parallel dimension," he said. "I think we're going to make it back,
but there's no sense making Will sit through probate if we don't."
Gryphon had to admit he had a point.

--G.
-><-
Benjamin D. Hutchins, Co-Founder, Editor-in-Chief, & Forum Mod
Eyrie Productions, Unlimited http://www.eyrie-productions.com/
zgryphon at that email service Google has
Ceterum censeo Carthaginem esse delendam.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
laudre
Member since Nov-14-06
428 posts
Feb-28-14, 03:11 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail laudre Click to send private message to laudre Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list Click to send message via AOL IM  
11. "RE: Fragment the Second"
In response to message #10
 
   > Major W. Thomas "Too Tall" Riker

Reminds me of this video, which illustrates the consequences of being well over six feet tall on a set scaled to fit people who are about 5'6".

"Mathematics brought rigor to economics. Unfortunately, it also brought mortis."
- Kenneth Boulding


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
JeanneHedge
Charter Member
933 posts
Feb-28-14, 03:36 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail JeanneHedge Click to send private message to JeanneHedge Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
12. "RE: Fragment the Second"
In response to message #10
 
  

> Major W. Thomas "Too Tall" Riker, adjutant to General Patricia
>"Terror" Currier and lead pilot of Concordia's second Veritech
>squadron, grinned through his neatly trimmed beard and swung himself
>to his feet. At six feet four inches tall - two inches above standard
>regulation height for a Veritech pilot - he lived up to the nickname
>his fellow pilots had bestowed on him in flight school.

I'd wonder if "Snakeshit" was around, but General Currier has a nickname already.


(In the movie We Were Soldiers Captain Ed "Too Tall" Freeman was a helicopter pilot and 2nd in command of Company "A" of the 229th Assault Helicopter Battalion, 1st Cavalry Division (Airmobile) during Vietnam War. Major Bruce "Snakeshit" Crandall was his CO. Freeman and Crandall are real people. Both were awarded the Medal of Honor for their actions in Vietnam during the Battle of Ia Drang Valley. And yes, Freeman was too tall, the first time he attempted to become a pilot in the Army. According to the movie, Crandall earned his nickname because he liked to fly low.)


Jeanne


Jeanne Hedge
http://www.jhedge.com
"Never give up, never surrender!"


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Gryphonadmin
Charter Member
18935 posts
Feb-28-14, 05:00 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail Gryphon Click to send private message to Gryphon Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
13. "RE: Fragment the Second"
In response to message #12
 
   >I'd wonder if "Snakeshit" was around, but General Currier has a
>nickname already.

If not a Wedge Defense Force pilot, it is a virtual certainty that there is a Colonial Warrior with that nickname, though his or her official on-paper callsign might be something a little more press-friendly. (If you recall, whenever anyone's "officially" talking to Snakeshit Crandall on the radio in We Were Soldiers, they call him "Ancient Serpent 6". :)

>(In the movie We Were Soldiers Captain Ed "Too Tall" Freeman
>was a helicopter pilot and 2nd in command of Company "A" of the 229th
>Assault Helicopter Battalion, 1st Cavalry Division (Airmobile) during
>Vietnam War.

It's true! He's a pretty fascinating character, too, barely touched on in the film because he's not part of the main cast. The real Ed Freeman was in the Navy in WWII and fought as an infantry soldier in Korea - flying helicopters in Vietnam was his third military career.

Some of the most interesting figures in Vietnam War history are like that. The late Michael J. Novosel (author of Dustoff: Memoir of an Army Aviator), for instance, flew bombers with the Army Air Force in WWII, then transitioned into the USAF when it became a separate service in 1947. He left active duty after Korea, and when he tried to get his reserve commission reactivated so he could volunteer for Vietnam, they told him he was too old and they didn't need any more officers at his level... so he resigned and joined the Army to fly helicopters as a warrant officer. That's pretty baller, you ask me.

>Major Bruce "Snakeshit" Crandall was his CO. Freeman and
>Crandall are real people. Both were awarded the Medal of Honor for
>their actions in Vietnam during the Battle of Ia Drang Valley.

Bruce Crandall is a god damn rock star. The stuff they show him doing in We Were Soldiers (which is a helluva movie, by the way, kids - don't let Mel Gibson scare you off) not only really happened, that wasn't the only time in his career as an Army aviator he did something that badass.

I had a long and complicated explication of my internally conflicted views on warfare and warfighters here, but you know what, the hell with it - this isn't the time or place. The fact remains that Bruce Crandall is a god damn rock star.

--G.
-><-
Benjamin D. Hutchins, Co-Founder, Editor-in-Chief, & Forum Mod
Eyrie Productions, Unlimited http://www.eyrie-productions.com/
zgryphon at that email service Google has
Ceterum censeo Carthaginem esse delendam.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
JeanneHedge
Charter Member
933 posts
Feb-28-14, 05:56 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail JeanneHedge Click to send private message to JeanneHedge Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
14. "RE: Fragment the Second"
In response to message #13
 
   >>I'd wonder if "Snakeshit" was around, but General Currier has a
>>nickname already.
>
>If not a Wedge Defense Force pilot, it is a virtual certainty
>that there is a Colonial Warrior with that nickname, though his or her
>official on-paper callsign might be something a little more
>press-friendly. (If you recall, whenever anyone's "officially"
>talking to Snakeshit Crandall on the radio in We Were Soldiers,
>they call him "Ancient Serpent 6". :)

I think you may get a kick out of the President's remarks during his Medal of Honor presentation ceremony (not quite half-way down the page - search for the word "snake" ^_^ )


>Bruce Crandall is a god damn rock star. The stuff they show him doing
>in We Were Soldiers (which is a helluva movie, by the way, kids
>- don't let Mel Gibson scare you off) not only really happened, that
>wasn't the only time in his career as an Army aviator he did something
>that badass.

The book, We Were Soldiers Once... And Young, by Lt General Harold Moore (Ret) and Joseph Galloway (Mel Gibson and Barry Pepper, respectively, in the movie) is excellent too.

Jeanne


Jeanne Hedge
http://www.jhedge.com
"Never give up, never surrender!"


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Zemyla
Member since Mar-26-08
115 posts
Mar-10-14, 06:27 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail Zemyla Click to send private message to Zemyla Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list Click to send message via AOL IM  
15. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #0
 
   > "M5 and I have an understanding," she said to Gryphon's
>continuing baffled look. "It involves him doing what he's told and me
>not popping down to Engineering to explain my point of view with an
>axe."

Oh, so that's what General Galaxy needed to do with the YF-21. Shame this never happened, and they didn't read your notes.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Gryphonadmin
Charter Member
18935 posts
Jun-17-17, 01:40 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail Gryphon Click to send private message to Gryphon Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
16. "Fragment the Third"
In response to message #0
 
   LAST EDITED ON Jun-19-17 AT 02:54 PM (EDT)
 
(Gryphon is in his office shortly after the Challenger's christening ceremony, scouring the want-ads for a helm officer.)

	The Chief punched the intercom panel on his desk without
looking at it and said in an irritable tone of voice,
"Unless you're bringing me a Class A helmsman, don't bother
me right now."
The door opened all the same, admitting the trim shape of his
assistant Ruri, a creature of indeterminate species who looked like a
human girl in her early teens, except for the far-too-mature look of
bored ennui on her pretty face and the curious pale blue shade of her
hair. She stood in the doorway, unimpressed by the incipient wrath
implied by her superior's growl, and said flatly,
"By a strange coincidence."
Then she stepped aside and allowed the person behind her to
enter the office.
Gryphon looked up as if prepared to be further annoyed, then
blinked in puzzlement. The person whom Ruri had just shown into his
office was another girl, taller but no less trim, who crossed the
threshold with a slightly fey grace that was wholly out of place in
this old-fashioned, cluttered office. She stood just inside the
doorway, a lovely girl in a simple gray jumpsuit, with long, straight
hair that was a shade or two darker, but the same gray-blue hue as
Ruri's. Where Ruri's eyes were golden and bored-looking, this one's
were steel-gray and curious, as though she had never seen an office
before.
Aside from her odd hair color and peculiar grace, the only
things about this newcomer that didn't look entirely human were her
rather large ears, which stood out from her head, jutting through her
hair, and came to delicate points. They weren't as extreme as, say,
the ears of a Hyelian, but they weren't the understated points of a
Vulcan or Romulan, either.
Gryphon was looking at her as if he thought he ought to know
who she was, but either it wasn't coming to him or he kept thinking of
somebody else instead. He came slowly up out of his chair, the
expression on his face changing from puzzlement to amazement at about
the same rate as he rose, until he was fully standing and fully
amazed-looking.
With a slightly mischievous smile, the girl in gray squared
herself up to a very respectable military attention and gave a
slightly odd salute, touching the first two fingers of her right hand
to her forehead a little above her right eyebrow.
The movement seemed to jar Gryphon loose from his frozen
astonishment.
"Well, I'll be damned," he murmured; then his face split in a
huge grin and he lunged out from behind his desk, rounding it with
arms spread wide. "LAFIEL!" he cried, seizing the elven girl in an
embrace that, at first glance, seemed rather too rough for her.
She weathered it easily, though, and returned it in kind.
When they'd finished, he stepped back, hands on her shoulders,
delighted astonishment on his face.
"What are you doing here?" he asked.
"I heard a rumor that you needed a helmsman," she replied;
then she smiled, saluted again, and said in a sharp, military voice,
"Lafiel Abriel Nei Dobrusk Paryunu, reporting for duty, Captain!"
Gryphon blinked, then gave her a a look that combined
skepticism with surprise.
"Aren't you a little busy to be taking a day job?" he
inquired.
Lafiel made a dismissive gesture. "I'm retired," she told
him. "I'm over three hundred, you know - practically in my dotage.
It's time for me to lay aside the intricate duties of state and spend
my twilight years in quiet, relaxed pursuits."
"I hadn't heard anything about a change of power in the
Empire."
"We didn't exactly send out a press kit," said Lafiel wryly.
"The Humankind Empire Abh isn't a corporation, that we have to
advertise our changes of management - oh!" She blinked and looked
down; the Chief's beagle had come over to introduce himself, and was
now standing with his forepaws braced against her knees, tail wagging
furiously, looking up at her. "Hello," she said with a smile, bending
down to pet him.
"Wolfgang, down," said Gryphon with good-natured exasperation.
Wolfgang got down on all his feet again, but didn't leave off wagging
until Lafiel stopped scratching behind his ears and shooed him back to
his basket. To Gryphon's mild surprise, when shooed, the dog went,
curling up contendedly.
"Well," said Gryphon, strolling back behind his desk with a
comically exaggerated military-superior air. "So you want to join the
International Police, eh?"
Lafiel gave him a look, then played along, bowing like the
teenager she resembled and blurting, "Oh, yes, sir! More than
anything!"
"Hmm." Gryphon threw himself down in his chair, put his feet
up on his desk, and told her, "We don't just take anybody here in the
IPO, you know. What are your qualifications?"
Lafiel adopted a look of intense consideration. "Well... I
was in the Wedge Defense Force for five years... I have 5,000 hours in
the VF-1 and VF/A-4 variable-configuration fighters... and I ruled a
galactic empire of four hundred billion sentients for 300 years."
Gryphon swung his feet off his desk, slapped his palms down on
the blotter and stood up again, leaning forward.
"Beautiful," he said. "You're hired." He punched a key on his
intercom, then noticed that Ruri was still standing in the doorway and
switched it off again with a mock-embarrassed cough. "Ruri, please
commission Her Majesty a lieutenant commander in the Space Force and
file all the usual crap accordingly."
"Right," said Ruri with her usual air of boredom, and she
turned and went back to her own desk in the outer office.
Gryphon dropped the mock-pompous air he'd assumed for the
"interview" and grinned at Lafiel, then pulled an old flip-top
communicator out of his pocket and flipped it open. "Gryphon to
Challenger."
"Go ahead, sir," a voice replied.
"Lore, have the bridge fitters finished yet?"
"Not quite. They're still working on the science station." A
wry note crept into the remote speaker's voice as he added, "Some of
the controls needed some reinforcement."
"Ah," said Gryphon, nodding, though the person to whom he was
speaking couldn't see him. "Well, when they're done with that, have
them re-do the helm station with type 11-C controls, would you?"
"11-C, sir?"
"That's right." Gryphon grinned and said, "The Abh Empire is
having a special on used royalty, and Ruri just got us one hell of a
deal."

--G.
-><-
Benjamin D. Hutchins, Co-Founder, Editor-in-Chief, & Forum Mod
Eyrie Productions, Unlimited http://www.eyrie-productions.com/
zgryphon at that email service Google has
Ceterum censeo Carthaginem esse delendam.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Gryphonadmin
Charter Member
18935 posts
Jun-19-17, 04:01 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail Gryphon Click to send private message to Gryphon Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
19. "Fragment the Fourth"
In response to message #16
 
   LAST EDITED ON Jun-19-17 AT 04:01 PM (EDT)
 
(Challenger has performed well in the first day's somewhat-halfassed trial runs.)

	"A fine ship," was Lafiel's judgment as she locked down her
console after they'd returned to port, moored and shut down.
"I hope so," said Gryphon. Then he thumbed the intercom
all-call on his conn arm and announced, "OK, everybody, listen up.
Nice work today; Monday we get serious. Take the weekend off, and I
want everybody back here at ten-hundred hours Monday morning, ready to
move into your quarters full-time and take her to work. I want to see
if we can have her fully operational by a week from then, without
missing sleep. Gryphon out."
He switched the channel off, skritched the ship's beagle, and
said to his bridge crew, "Too optimistic?"
"I don't think so," said Hanson Davion, patting his console.
"I think she's ready."
"I share Dr. Davion's conviction," Klaang boomed, smiling
broadly. "We shall carve a new legend across the stars!"
"Right on, my Klingon brother!" Lore declared, high-fiving the
science officer.
"And we'll take the Blue Riband away from the WDF for sure,"
added T'Vek with a wicked grin.
"The sooner we get operational," said Hoshi, "the sooner poor
Krontep can take a day off."
"Days off are for the weak," grumbled Klaang.
"Remember that the next time your leave gets cancelled for an
alert," Ruri muttered.
"Quarters!" Jinto Kirk exclaimed, slapping his forehead.
"... Beg pardon, Jinto?" said Gryphon.
"Uh, sorry, sir," said Kirk, his cheeks reddening. "I just
realized that Commander Paryunu needs quarters."
"Abriel," said Lafiel automatically.
"Sorry?"
Lafiel smiled and said, "If you -must- stand on ceremony and
use one of my non-given names in a form of address, you should use
Abriel," she explained.
"Ah. Sorry, thank you. Commander Abriel needs quarters,
Captain."
"Well, you're an enterprising young man, Mr. Kirk - see to it."
Young Kirk gave the captain an odd look; Gryphon looked back
in puzzlement for a moment, then winced.
"Would you believe," he said, "that wasn't deliberate? Carry
on, Mr. Kirk."

--G.
-><-
Benjamin D. Hutchins, Co-Founder, Editor-in-Chief, & Forum Mod
Eyrie Productions, Unlimited http://www.eyrie-productions.com/
zgryphon at that email service Google has
Ceterum censeo Carthaginem esse delendam.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Star Ranger4
Charter Member
2177 posts
Jun-19-17, 08:41 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail Star%20Ranger4 Click to send private message to Star%20Ranger4 Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list Click to send message via AOL IM  
20. "RE: Fragment the Fourth"
In response to message #19
 
  
> "Would you believe," he said, "that wasn't deliberate?  Carry 
>on, Mr. Kirk."
>

Which really makes it that much more hilarious!


Of COURSE you wernt expecting it!
No One expects the FANNISH INQUISITION!
RCW# 86


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Mercutio
Member since May-26-13
859 posts
Jun-21-17, 00:23 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail Mercutio Click to send private message to Mercutio Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
23. "RE: Fragment the Fourth"
In response to message #19
 
   LAST EDITED ON Jun-21-17 AT 00:24 AM (EDT)
 
My favorite part of this (and other times it has popped up) is that there's none of that bullshit "be here at 0600; you can either go to bed at 2100 or not have a full nights sleep, your call" nonsense.

-Merc
Keep Rat


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Gryphonadmin
Charter Member
18935 posts
Jun-21-17, 00:27 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail Gryphon Click to send private message to Gryphon Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
24. "RE: Fragment the Fourth"
In response to message #23
 
   >My favorite part of this (and other times it has popped up) is that
>there's none of that bullshit "be here at 0600; you can either go to
>bed at 2100 or not have a full nights sleep, your call" nonsense.

In the IPO, and the WDF before it, we have always been firm believers in the principle that people screw up less often and less catastrophically when they are not bitch-ass tired.

--G.
-><-
Benjamin D. Hutchins, Co-Founder, Editor-in-Chief, & Forum Mod
Eyrie Productions, Unlimited http://www.eyrie-productions.com/
zgryphon at that email service Google has
Ceterum censeo Carthaginem esse delendam.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
McFortner
Charter Member
434 posts
Jun-17-17, 11:27 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail McFortner Click to send private message to McFortner Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list Click to send message via ICQ  
17. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #0
 
   > "M5 and I have an understanding," she said to Gryphon's
>continuing baffled look. "It involves him doing what he's told and me
>not popping down to Engineering to explain my point of view with an
>axe."

Ah, the Beeblebrox school of computer programming I see.

Michael
“If you don’t open that exit hatch this moment I shall zap straight off to your major data banks and reprogram you with a very large axe, got that?”

Michael C. Fortner
"Maxim 37: There is no such thing as "overkill".
There is only "open fire" and "I need to reload".


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Star Ranger4
Charter Member
2177 posts
Jun-19-17, 02:49 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail Star%20Ranger4 Click to send private message to Star%20Ranger4 Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list Click to send message via AOL IM  
18. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #0
 
   LAST EDITED ON Jun-19-17 AT 02:50 PM (EDT)
 

> "M5 and I have an understanding," she said to Gryphon's
>continuing baffled look. "It involves him doing what he's told and me
>not popping down to Engineering to explain my point of view with an
>axe."
>


This is even more Hilarious now, cause I was over at the shipyard in STO last night and noticed both a, said ship, and that B, its flavor text mentions its successor, the M6


Of COURSE you wernt expecting it!
No One expects the FANNISH INQUISITION!
RCW# 86


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
BeardedFerret
Member since Apr-21-08
511 posts
Jun-20-17, 11:57 PM (EDT)
Click to EMail BeardedFerret Click to send private message to BeardedFerret Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
21. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #0
 
   Ahhhhh, this all sounds great. Shame it wound up on the scrap heap.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Gryphonadmin
Charter Member
18935 posts
Jun-21-17, 00:16 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail Gryphon Click to send private message to Gryphon Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
22. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #21
 
   >Ahhhhh, this all sounds great. Shame it wound up on the scrap heap.

I've been tempted to try and salvage it, but there's so much of it that wouldn't work now, it wouldn't really be worth it. (And a lot of what isn't outright unusable is... pretty awkward, really. Lots of really obvious TNG-style Hey It's Characters You Haven't Seen For a While scenes and stilted here's-how-this-works dialogue.)

--G.
-><-
Benjamin D. Hutchins, Co-Founder, Editor-in-Chief, & Forum Mod
Eyrie Productions, Unlimited http://www.eyrie-productions.com/
zgryphon at that email service Google has
Ceterum censeo Carthaginem esse delendam.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
BeardedFerret
Member since Apr-21-08
511 posts
Jun-22-17, 03:05 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail BeardedFerret Click to send private message to BeardedFerret Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
25. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #22
 
   >>Ahhhhh, this all sounds great. Shame it wound up on the scrap heap.
>
>I've been tempted to try and salvage it, but there's so much of it
>that wouldn't work now, it wouldn't really be worth it. (And a lot of
>what isn't outright unusable is... pretty awkward, really. Lots of
>really obvious TNG-style Hey It's Characters You Haven't Seen For a
>While scenes and stilted here's-how-this-works dialogue.)
>
>--G.

That's a shame. Neat little one-off series like Manhunt, Star Crossed and Project Phoenix are some of my favourite bits of the UF back catalogue. Plus, Riker's Dad, another crossrip and a bit of space shooty action? Extremely my shit.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top
Peter Eng
Charter Member
1381 posts
Jun-22-17, 11:37 AM (EDT)
Click to EMail Peter%20Eng Click to send private message to Peter%20Eng Click to view user profileClick to add this user to your buddy list  
26. "RE: Fragments of a Scrapped Story"
In response to message #25
 
   >Riker's Dad, another crossrip and a bit of space
>shooty action?

Well, two out of three isn't bad; I'm pretty sure that this is Riker's twin from a transporter malfunction.

Peter Eng
--
Insert humorous comment here.


  Alert | IP Printer-friendly page | Edit | Reply | Reply With Quote | Top

Conferences | Topics | Previous Topic | Next Topic

[ YUM ] [ BIG ] [ ??!? ] [ RANT ] [ GNDN ] [ STORE ] [ FORUM ] GOTW ] [ VAULT ]

version 3.3 © 2001
Eyrie Productions, Unlimited
Benjamin D. Hutchins
E P U (Colour)