LAST EDITED ON Mar-12-10 AT 05:43 PM (EST)
(oops - posted in the wrong conference... can you move it for me?)Excellent - well done. Pretty much what I was expecting, except perhaps the bit with Kei. Wasn't sure how you were planning on having G end up jumping dimensions, but it seemed like this whole thing could easily segue into the beginning of Split Infinitive.
And Tali's epilogue - perfect. She won't be able to find what she's looking for until G gets back, but at least she now has time to come to that realization (and accept it) in her own time and not as a complete halt. I'm looking forward to seeing the reunion, even if it's just a side-note to another story; I don't know when your brain will make that happen, but I think you'll find that one day it will have to be told, just to give T&G some closure.
I think I've finally realized the think I like best about your stories - you know where you want them to go when you start them, but you're not afraid to let them evolve and go in totally different directions when they want to. And that gives them a real flow that's missing in some authors' stories. I can't remember specifics right now, but I know I've read books where you can feel the author tugging on the steering wheel to keep the story moving in a straight line. Your stories twist and turn like a river, with eddies and pools, rapids and rough water, all flowing towards a great big ocean, from which new ideas are created and rain down to start the process all over again.
Bravo! Bravissimo!
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