well, like several others who've posted, I've never seen CSI, but that didn't stop me from enjoying the story.
1 bit that I rather liked was
"Tell me something I want to hear, Greg," said Catherine.
"OK; your hair looks fabulous that way," Greg Sanders replied
As someone who often makes smartass comments myself, I found Greg's response to be quite entertaining.
Looking forward to whatever you put out next, however long it takes. Having finally seen Red vs Blue, I plan to go back and reread 'In for a Penny' and hopefully catch more references this time. 8)