>>3.1) Who is footing his bill at WPI? The underground isn't rich
>>enough, I doubt that he's got the personal cash (Ok, stupid
>>assumption.)
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>His family. He has got one... We don't by any chance know his father, do we?
>Rina Dragonaar, now, she wasn't planned the whole time. She came
>along when I sent out an open call for a minor character to be the
>member of Amanda's fighter squadron who was sent to take Devlin from
>his cabin to the flight deck. That was all she was originally
>supposed to do...
Well, three cheers for that happy accident. I'm certainly sold. :)
Otherwise, I think I need a sedative. That portion was decidedly manic in a most controlled way. Were you going for getting the reader to hold their breath for the entire read, or what? I need to re-read that again sometime when I'm not merging into my 14th hour at work. Cool stuff.
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Chad Collier
Digital Bitch
J. Random VFX Company