>One thing that bothered me was the response to Akio's arrival, where
>the characters rushed to immediately inform Corwin and Utena. I can
>see this from the younger members of the party, but Belldandy at the
>very least would know that you don't bring problems with the wedding
>to the bride and groom unless absolutely necessary. I realize this
>isn't really a story problem, but it just made me go "No! You Do Not
>Do That." which is pretty uncommon with your stories.

... Yes, clearly it would've been much better to let them come out, all buoyant and chipper, and just see him without any advance warning at all.

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