Been a longtime lurker. Sometimes I ignore commentary due to getting miffed with the people who nitpick perfectly good stories. I enjoyed it. It came out right around an emotional time for me- I put off reading it for a week. I just saw the sadness and wanted to say:
Gryphon, you guys do an awesome job. This story helped me a lot, I never heard of any of this before- and your writing makes me want to find the series, much like you did for me with Utena.
I will say- the first scene with Naga--> loved it, and I saw where it seemed to be going.
I look forward to writings, and keep checking 2-3 times a week. I'm really happy I can read them on my iPhone, I can't sit @ a computer white screen for hours like I used to 5 years ago, but lying in bed with an iPhone or iPad is perfect.