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Forum Name: Symphony of the Sword/The Order of the Rose
Topic ID: 529
Message ID: 11
#11, RE: TFLF Chapter 16: Discovery
Posted by dbrandon on Jul-31-18 at 09:45 AM
In response to message #0
I enjoyed this, but I don't have a lot to say, just that after listening to the track again, I think that

make it better
do it faster
makes us stronger
more than ever
hour after
our work is never over

(as reported in the fic) should actually be

make it better
do it faster
makes us stronger
more than ever
hour after hour
work is never over

Not entirely sure, but it seems to make a bit more sense?

--dbrandon