Since you asked for more comments, I'll repeat the one I sent you privately earlier and add a few more.

>176 Aya refers to the uniforms seen in Star Trek: The Motion
>Picture.

The infamous footie pajamas. Not only did they look terribly impractical to get in or out of, they were all colored silver-grey or tan, causing particularly wooden actors to literally blend into the background. What were you thinking, Mr. Theiss?

>1130 This has been building up in Rina for quite a while now.

Poor girl. Especially sympathized with the "You didn't do anything wrong," "Then why did you send me away?!"

>1609 I've always enjoyed this little scene. I feel I captured
>the personalities of the Enterprise command staff pretty well.

I agree. It's one of the treats of this movement. I really liked Gryph teasing Jean-Luc on their old acquaintance, and Kei likewise (I dunno how Patrick Stewart does it, but she's right).

>1625 The thread connecting the careers of Noonian Soong and
>Timothy Wayneright is an excellent example of the way things often
>dovetail together in the UF development process - often without much
>nudging from the creators.

I still remember my shock of realization that yes, yes that works, when I found out you'd made UF-Thrawn a Gamilon.

>1919 We wanted this section to kick the reader in the gut

It certainly did that for me, particularly the bit where Liza's control can't hold any more and she just wails out all of her pain and regret into her pillow.

>2363 There. Liza has now arrived at the bottom of the curve.
>Now she'll either collapse completely...
>
>2364 ... or start back up.

I remember reading the draft of this movement; when I got to the bit where Saionji stabs himself, my "OMFG!!" reaction wasn't far off Liza's.

>2729 (At least she will be if Anthy gives her a shove at the
>right moment.)

Better that than the one Akio got. ;)

>3615 The kellicam is a Klingon unit of distance. I'm
>not sure how far it is. Fannish math found at the Memory Alpha wiki
>says something on the order of two kilometers, whatever that is in
>real units.

'bout a mile and a quarter.

Thanks again for posting these.