>I have adjusted the dialogue in the last scene, where Hannelore visits
>Gryphon to request his counsel regarding the letter she received from
>Fritz, to reflect developments in Gallian Gothic. This was
>surprisingly tricky to do for such a small edit, since I had to
>preserve the feeling of melancholy while simultaneously injecting a
>note of good news, but overall I think it works. It may even have
>lifted Hannelore's spirits a little and given her some hope that she
>could make her situation work after all.

I'm not a professional writer, mind you, but I think it works very well. Perhaps the fact that I'm not sure I'd have realized how difficult it was is proof of how good you've gotten at this.

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Authors of our fates
Orchestrate our fall from grace
Poorest players on the stage
Our defiance drives us straight to the edge