That feels much better. I like that Neuroi-chan managed to express how she feels about not being able to communicate with Yoshika, the fight added that je ne sais quoi, and Marisa calling out Reimu helps bring more depth to her.

Also, introducing Yoshika's new Striker works better for me; it's something like an inversion of Chekov's Gun (If somebody is shot with a gun, it should be placed in the plot beforehand?)

In metaphorical summary, I like the remodel you did, and I think that the deck you added is an excellent touch.

Peter Eng
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