I think the thing that sticks out the most for me is how well you've captured the feel of these events; including the sort of mutual shock that they dont realize will become deep atachment between Sanya and Elia the first time their eyes meet.

Oh, and I love the Col too, you do a great job of personifying the sort of orussian mindset of "we're asked to do the impossible with the impropable and insufficent support. We will therefore be victorious, because if we're not we're dead and won't have to worry anyway"