My immediate reaction:

(lays forehead on floor) I cast a shadow in your presence, for you have finally written an Eva fic that gives a satisfying wrapup and does not mess with my head.

The only thing I can immediately think to comment on otherwise is a matter of style and personal preference, and having read it back after typing it works just as well your way.

I think I'm going to have to waait until I've slept some to get into anything deaied; I've been going to bed about the time this was posted fr the past week, and need to maintain that pattern.

- CD