LAST EDITED ON Dec-04-07 AT 00:24 AM (EST)
 
I just finished reading chapter three and since i don't know where reviews go here's my current score and opinion.

score is 6 of 100 (never given 100 mind you)

My opinion however is mostly positive as it's good writing. Having said this i find a few things out of place.

1) Rei's reaction to DJ doesn't sit well. Rei didn't talk to anyone except the commander until Shinji saved her life. and DJ arrives sits down and she feels compelled to talk to him? this seems wrong but then maybe your Rei doesn't take the meds the original character did.

2)DJ has a flat background one that we're just supposed to accept, not to mention he's a bit of a road runner. I know it's early and this could change but it still doesn't sit well.

3)sync tables all out of wack. by how DJ sync's with a suit he'd have berserker all the time if it had his mom of bulter in it.

otherwise i find the story to be unfolding nicely, i like jon quite a bit for some reason.

Ok offsides has a point. i'd best explain my scoring system else misunderstanding may ensue.

my table is divded into a number of parts

1) writing

NXE 20/20

2)characters

Rei 6/10

Jon 3/10

DJ 3/10

Gendo 1/2

Misato 2/5

Ritsuko 1/5

maya 1/5

3)plot holes

minus 2 for every plot hole i find.

4) bad taste

Minus one for anything I find in bad taste.

5) Good taste/creativity

Plus one for creative explanations and the like.

there you have it my system.