>>>Oh hey - yeah, that explanation works much better. I like it.

I concur.

>>It was convenient that we had already long since established that
>>Misato doesn't know shit about anything technological. Gave Maya and
>>Truss someone to explain it all to, without resorting to the clunky "I
>>am explaining this to someone who, logically, should know it better
>>than I do" stuff the AGSys guys do in the original version.
>
>Aye, that's pretty handy. Also, I liked how you kept the consequences
>of the original, but in a different 'shape' - as well as annotation of
>atmospheric conditions pertinent to the emergency

Yes. There might be a typo, though, where it says "render a few hundred square miles upwind of the site uninhabitable" shouldn't that be "downwind"?