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Excellent - well done. Pretty much what I was expecting, except perhaps the bit with Kei. Wasn't sure how you were planning on having G end up jumping dimensions, but it seemed like this whole thing could easily segue into the beginning of Split Infinitive.

And Tali's epilogue - perfect. She won't be able to find what she's looking for until G gets back, but at least she now has time to come to that realization (and accept it) in her own time and not as a complete halt. I'm looking forward to seeing the reunion, even if it's just a side-note to another story; I don't know when your brain will make that happen, but I think you'll find that one day it will have to be told, just to give T&G some closure.

I think I've finally realized the think I like best about your stories - you know where you want them to go when you start them, but you're not afraid to let them evolve and go in totally different directions when they want to. And that gives them a real flow that's missing in some authors' stories. I can't remember specifics right now, but I know I've read books where you can feel the author tugging on the steering wheel to keep the story moving in a straight line. Your stories twist and turn like a river, with eddies and pools, rapids and rough water, all flowing towards a great big ocean, from which new ideas are created and rain down to start the process all over again.

Bravo! Bravissimo!

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>(oops - posted in the wrong conference... can you move it for me?)

Sadly, I can't merge the three(!) Appendix threads we end up with as a result, but yes, I can. :)

>I think I've finally realized the think I like best about your stories
>- you know where you want them to go when you start them, but you're
>not afraid to let them evolve and go in totally different directions
>when they want to.

Well, sometimes I'm afraid to, but I usually convince myself to go with it anyway. As I said in the Appendix annotations, things often just sort of come to a grinding halt if I fight them too much, anyway...

Glad you liked it. :)

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>>(oops - posted in the wrong conference... can you move it for me?)
>
>Sadly, I can't merge the three(!) Appendix threads we end up with as a
>result, but yes, I can. :)
>
Sorry - there were -zero- when I started...

>>I think I've finally realized the think I like best about your stories
>>- you know where you want them to go when you start them, but you're
>>not afraid to let them evolve and go in totally different directions
>>when they want to.
>
>Well, sometimes I'm afraid to, but I usually convince myself to
>go with it anyway. As I said in the Appendix annotations, things
>often just sort of come to a grinding halt if I fight them too much,
>anyway...
>
As to being afraid of letting the story just go where it wants, there has to be a Yodaism in there somewhere, but it's just not coming...

>Glad you liked it. :)
>
So am I - it had potential to be a real huge downer, but it ended up on a light-enough note that it wasn't. In fact, had we not known that G was ending up in an alternate universe, we might even have the level of hope that Tali has in the end. Either way, we know she's likely to still be around in 2388, and I'm sure she'll try and contact him, unless she's afraid he doesn't want her to after all these years...

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[...] in order to be a realist you must believe in miracles.
-- David Ben Gurion
EPU RCW #π
#include <stdsig.h>