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#0, TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Verbena on Dec-07-14 at 08:46 PM
How the heck has no one commented on this yet?

Honestly, I know nothing and less about the production of music. (Me and music is like Corwin and art or ladies' fashion. I know what I like. But how it gets that way? No idea.) But I was pleased that the piece was written by someone who -does- know...without making it sound technical enough to go over my head. Using knowledge to add verisimilitude without harming the message. That I -do- know something about, and it ain't easy.

I will admit that, in Mio's place, nothing Corwin did would have put me at ease. I would have been nervous throughout breakfast and not gone anywhere with him--would have left right there if he didn't make his point at the restaurant. But I'm paranoid a little more security-conscious than a high schooler, I admit.


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this world created by the
hands of the gods
everything is false
everything is a LIE
the final days have come
now
let everything be destroyed

--mu


#1, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Gryphon on Dec-07-14 at 08:54 PM
In response to message #0
>I will admit that, in Mio's place, nothing Corwin did would have put
>me at ease. I would have been nervous throughout breakfast and not
>gone anywhere with him--would have left right there if he didn't make
>his point at the restaurant.

Well, to be fair, Mio was nervous, just... not about what you're probably figuring she ought to've been nervous about. She lives in a world (in the philosophical sense, not literally referring to Dìqiú) where that stuff doesn't happen much, and anyway, she wasn't uneasy about him, as such. She wasn't worried about her own safety, put it that way.

Maybe I should look at clarifying that a bit. One of the benefits of this being an experiment, I can adjust it with rather more sense of freedom than I have about messing with Big Releases after they're out. Have to re-record the audio if I do, but hey, that's life in the big citymiddle of nowhere. :)

--G.
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#2, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Willard on Dec-07-14 at 09:02 PM
In response to message #0
I was going to post but then the forum went all weird on me...

Yeah, anyway, no musical skill here either but I enjoyed this one. Yui isn't the only one that's growing as a musician!

Willard


#3, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Gryphon on Dec-07-14 at 09:15 PM
In response to message #2
>Yui isn't the only one that's growing as a musician!

There are a couple of different purposes for this particular chapter. One was to fill in some of the gap I inadvertently left in Volume One by skipping over the first week and a half of Kate's tenure, and better explain why Mio mentions Corwin a couple of times in later chapters.

Another, though, was to try to reconcile Mio's assertion, repeated a couple of times in the canon, that she's a bassist because she wants to avoid attracting attention with the intricate, quite showy bass parts that are featured in many of HTT's songs (like "Cagayake! Girls").

--G.
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#5, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Nathan on Dec-07-14 at 10:52 PM
In response to message #3
>>Yui isn't the only one that's growing as a musician!
>
>There are a couple of different purposes for this particular chapter.
>One was to fill in some of the gap I inadvertently left in Volume One
>by skipping over the first week and a half of Kate's tenure, and
>better explain why Mio mentions Corwin a couple of times in later
>chapters.
>
>Another, though, was to try to reconcile Mio's assertion, repeated a
>couple of times in the canon, that she's a bassist because she wants
>to avoid attracting attention with the intricate, quite showy bass
>parts that are featured in many of HTT's songs (like "Cagayake!
>Girls").

I'd've just figured that there was a disconnect between what her insecurities wanted and what her fingers thought was fun when she was in the zone and letting them run the show, but this works.

-----

"V, did you do something foolish?"

"Yes, and it was glorious."


#6, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Gryphon on Dec-07-14 at 10:58 PM
In response to message #5
>I'd've just figured that there was a disconnect between what her
>insecurities wanted and what her fingers thought was fun when she was
>in the zone and letting them run the show, but this works.

Well, there's some of that going on too - hence Corwin's being able to note that he's heard her play better; this is just by way of giving her an opportunity to develop a little more consistency. You have to learn why things work on a starship. :)

--G.
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#14, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by The Traitor on Dec-10-14 at 02:55 PM
In response to message #5
>I'd've just figured that there was a disconnect between what her
>insecurities wanted and what her fingers thought was fun

On a more serious note, I enjoyed this very much. It's short but very, very sweet, though I think you have to have more knowledge of the source material than I do to get the full effect. =]

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"She's old, she's lame, she's barren too, // "She's not worth feed or hay, // "But I'll give her this," - he blew smoke at me - // "She was something in her day." -- Garnet Rogers, Small Victory

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#4, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Silversword on Dec-07-14 at 09:51 PM
In response to message #0
>How the heck has no one commented on this yet?

In my case, because December is "work kicks my arse'o'clock" and I've barely had time to read it. I am remiss in my duties, and intend to rectify at the first sensible opportunity. :)

~Silv'


#7, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Peter Eng on Dec-08-14 at 02:23 AM
In response to message #0
>How the heck has no one commented on this yet?
>

Just got a job last week. Temporary income, but long-term temporary. Kind of distracts me.

As for commentary...

"Have you ever watched the Who in concert with Ritsu?"
"Not in person..."

I wouldn't have expected that they'd had the chance to see the Who in person, but I admit that it would be great if they had.

Peter Eng
--
Rock and roll never dies.


#8, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Nathan on Dec-08-14 at 04:20 AM
In response to message #7
>As for commentary...
>
>"Have you ever watched the Who in concert with Ritsu?"
>"Not in person..."
>
>I wouldn't have expected that they'd had the chance to see the Who in
>person, but I admit that it would be great if they had.

...Somehow, it would make perfect sense if Yui knew a Doctor who could help with that...

-----

"V, did you do something foolish?"

"Yes, and it was glorious."


#9, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Droken on Dec-08-14 at 10:36 AM
In response to message #8
Actually I think a few of them are still around. I recall a mention that Miki knows Pete Townshend.

#12, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Gryphon on Dec-08-14 at 10:49 PM
In response to message #9
>Actually I think a few of them are still around. I recall a mention
>that Miki knows Pete Townshend.

This is indeed true. Project Hero came along 15 years too late for Keith Moon, alas, but the other three are still in play.

--G.
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#10, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Droken on Dec-08-14 at 01:01 PM
In response to message #0
On my second read-through, I noticed Corwin's email address. As it appears to be his new one local to Díqìu, I'm wondering if 'cvr3' was a little joke on his part or Gryph's. Either way, love those little things.

#11, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Gryphon on Dec-08-14 at 10:47 PM
In response to message #10
LAST EDITED ON Dec-08-14 AT 10:47 PM (EST)
 
>On my second read-through, I noticed Corwin's email address. As it
>appears to be his new one local to Díqìu, I'm wondering if 'cvr3'
>was a little joke on his part or Gryph's.

It's actually Korra's little joke (she still has root on the SCM mail server). Knight in shining armor, you know. :)

--G.
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#13, RE: TFLF: CH 3.5
Posted by Droken on Dec-08-14 at 11:22 PM
In response to message #11
Aha! That's even better. I can even picture the look he gave her when he saw it.