For those that want to see the whole story:

http://genom.otaking.org/chessmen

(assuming that Otaking's not being a bitch tonight.)
--
Geoff Depew - Mephron
"Big O! Showtime!"

- Will (the other guy)

One minor note, and please correct me if I'm wrong. Here's a quote from the story:

Kusanagi glared at the gorgoyle, then Koichi. "This is an outrage!
How dare you accuse--"
"No accusations have been made," Koichi said evenly. "But since we
obviously have just cause..." He turned to one of his guards. "Sakaguchi,
if you would please escort this lady to the _Gunbuster_..."
Sakaguchi nodded briskly. "Yes, sir."
"Now, hold on a minute--" Kusanagi spat.
"You know, this could easily be a capital offense." Koichi swept a
hand across his chest, a dismissive gesture. "Make sure she's got at least
four guards with her at all times. Take her away."
Kusanagi started to say something--no doubt an epithet--but Sakagu-
chi puller her away before she could spit it out. Koichi turned to Goliath
and asked, "Who did you find on that ship?"
"Two Federation officers. Combat Police, and Intelligence. Swear-
ing immunity from everything, and demanding that we let them resume travel-
ing to Moren Station." Goliath turned, looking at the diminishing backs of
Malso and her escort.

End quote...

Koichi is talking to Kusinagi, but at the end, you have Malso walking off. Did I miss something?

Tom 'Dreamshadow' Tjarks
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"There are no answers, only cross references."

Originally, it was going to be Jeena Malso. Bill re-did Jeena Malso into Motoko Kusanagi and neither of us caught the error.

(There's also a HELL of a lot of revising of the first Chessmen story, because some of the stuff doesn't quite work for me anymore, but that'll come after I finish 'Seven Nights of Stillness' and we collectively finish the next arc, that is tentatively titled en masse 'Books of Souls'.

dusting and cleaning will happen eventually. And we are going to put in the 'where we got it from' guide at some point...

--
Geoff Depew - Mephron
"Big O! Showtime!"

Good story, I like it. And you're using characters that don't normally get used. Was that intentional?

Tom 'Dreamshadow' Tjarks
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"There are no answers, only cross references."

There's a lot of changes from the source - the relationship between Giant Robo and Daisaku, for example. Savashtar's not even from anime (and I haven't been able to find any Warlock 5 series 1 comics to scan in an image of him, irritatingly).

I still remember the first time I gave a copy of it to someone to read and they hit the part about Max and just STARED at me... That was a moment of pure joy.

As I said, there's gonna be some more - backstory, and the Books of Souls. (Which, I promise, will have a combat not seen since... um... one of the more recent Super Robot Wars games.)
--
Geoff Depew - Mephron
"Big O! Showtime!"

At least he's still in the "guess who wrote this part!" part
of the series. :)

- Will (redshirt #24...hey, it's a living)

I don't remember offhand (I have the amazing ability to forget a lot of what I read...thereby allowing me ot re-read it and get almost the same amount of enjoyment a second/third/fourth/nth time :)

I'm pretty sure the boggling was due to the whole...well, wait...I can say that...that's a SPOILER...
let's just say that the mech that's donated, and who it's donated to
...
and LONG HAIR???
boggle

I don't remember the shatterring offhand, either...and nothing is springing to mind, unfortunately

by the way...for some odd reason, the Arcadia strikes mental chordes of vorlonism...is that just me?

Depending on what happens after Books of Souls, we may explore that.

--
Geoff Depew - Mephron
"Big O! Showtime!"

http://www.geocities.com/black_hole_bomb/chessmen/chessmen.html

Hey, it's free. :)