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"CSI 102/103: Parallel Lines"
 
   [1] This opening narration is in the style of Dragnet, not CSI, but I couldn't resist the temptation.

[50] Common practice in real-life investigations, in case you didn't know.

[96] Inspector Grayson has a legitimate reason, which he states, but hey - "Because I can't stand that asshole Ecklie" would've worked too.

[140] We were very pleased with this - a tone-perfect CSI quip-to-credits moment.

[246] Warrick doesn't believe her, but Sara really was in the records office...

[260] ... where, in addition to the research she really was doing, she might have happened to make a lunch date.

[267] Roswell Gap is named for the town of Roswell, New Mexico - not because there's any particular UFO activity out there, but because a lot of the places in the Western Desert are named after places in the American Southwest.

[270] In the original cut of this episode, O'Riley's first name was given as "Tom", because I'd never seen any episode of CSI in which they'd actually mentioned his given name. I've since learned that it's Ray.

[275] In the UF universe the Pelican, from the Halo games, is the standard aerodyne light transport of the IPO Tactical Division, GENOM's White Legion, the Royal Salusian Marine Corps, and a good many other forces besides. It's also popular with private concerns like air ambulance services and express delivery services.

[301] I'd been listening to the Foo Fighters cover of the Gerry Rafferty song and had just used it as a placeholder for the street name. And then I forgot I did it. CC

[304] Nick's thread of the episode's multi-plot was developed and almost entirely written by Chad Collier.

I love having an editor, especially one I can trust enough to get the idea of what I'm trying to say even if I don't. It allows me to do things like sketch out dialog when I need to without worrying about the filling prose (gee, most of my previous writing was in screenplay format, go figure). It makes things easier for me, and it has the added pleasing effect of making my stuff seamless with his stuff. CC

[337] (UNMARKED POLICE CAR) CC

[413] I admit, Avalon has a desert largely to facilitate a "the CSIs get sent out into the desert" scene here - but the pseudocontinent is a large place, and it stands to reason that it wouldn't all have the same climate. Roswell Gap is quite far from the city of New Avalon, around a thousand miles: plenty far enough to make such a radical difference of climate workable.

[434] It involved seeing how long it would take a pig to rot.

[446] "Eat recycled food. It's good for the environment and okay for you!"

[511] We all have a great love for Doc Robbins around the studio. Some readers were disappointed that he didn't appear in "Locard's Exchange" - and, well, so were we, but we decided not to force the issue. We knew the opportunity would offer itself eventually... and it did.

[547] The standard-issue sidearm of the IPO's plainclothes branches (CID and the crime lab) is an advanced version of the Walther PPS, a compact conventional firearm in production since the early 21st century. The model made for the IPO is chambered for a special cartridge developed by the Quartermaster Bureau and used exclusively by the agency. It's called, unsurprisingly, .357 IPO.

Conventional firearms are issued to divisions like CID and the lab because they're cheaper to procure and easier to maintain than blasters, tend to make less of a mess when circumstances bring them into play, and have better agent accountability characteristics.

[625] On the other hand, Gryphon's been known to do all those things with Zoner, too, and they're not dating either.

[657] AFIS, the Automated Fingerprint Identification System, is the same in UF as it is in real life. Most species with fingers have fingerprints, so dactyloscopy's usefulness is not confined solely to humans.

[751] In UF, Catherine's maiden name, as we discover later in this episode, is Ardeen. She's originally from Titan, and almost all Titanese carry the genetic mutation that produces telepathy in humans. She's very, very slightly telepathic - not enough so to make any deliberate use of the ability, but enough that, in a situation like this, she unconsciously senses her oncoming attacker's hostile intent.

[784] Girls with guns kicking ass with science. Just doesn't get any better than that. CC

[833] This system, which notifies "non-combatant" personnel's superiors when those personnel get into gunfights, is intended as an aid to agent security, not a surveillance technique. The assumption is that someone whose job isn't to get into a gunfight is in trouble if lead starts flying, and might just be too busy to call for backup. It doesn't go off if said superiors are within a certain radius of the gunfight itself, the assumption there being that if they're there, they already know.

[837] As we can see here, Sara's been promoted since "Locard's Exchange". This was a matter of course. She had sufficient experience and seniority from her old job, with the Royal Salusian Ministry of Public Security's crime lab, to start with the IPO as a CSI3, but for the first three months of her IPO employment, she was considered a provisional hire.

[887] Eight shots might seem excessive to the layman - hell, it seems excessive to Sheriff Mobley - but it's perfectly in keeping with the IPO's policy: If the situation is such that you must open fire, you keep shooting until your opponent hits the ground. And believe me, with a modern semiautomatic pistol, it doesn't take long to squeeze off eight rounds.

[890] Greg's lab has an antique gas chromatograph mass spectrometer in it in much the same way that you occasionally see an ancient X-ray machine or a set of Victorian surgical instruments in a modern doctor's office.

[992] Fortunately, in both cases those impressions are quite strong.

[1169] The first was the improbably-named Syd Goggle, whom she shot to save Grissom in the unseen UF equivalent to the CSI first-season finale, "The Strip Strangler". In UF that would've happened sometime around mid-2407.

[1191] In real life, a favorite phrase of the late Derek Bacon. In and out of story, I picked it up from him.

[1222] Nothing, Catherine, it's just that I love you even more when you're mad.

[1368] Dr. Robbins has artificial legs below the knees. (So does the actor who plays him, in fact.) In UF, technology being what it is, they're bionic.

[1377] The cijowska is based on a medieval weapon - a sort of proto-mace - that appears in some of the illustrations in a 13th-century illuminated Bible known as the Maciejowski Bible.

[1381] Cheltaria (color, 2401) is a Salusian "historical epic" film based on an ancient epic poem. It tells the story of the mythical warrior queen Cheltaria, who unified the various tribes of Salusia at the dawn of that planet's civilization and led the revolt that overthrew the Padishah overlords who ruled the planet at the time. The movie is sort of the Salusian equivalent of Ben-Hur or The Longest Day.

[1388] In my mind's eye, I see this filmed from above, with a tracking shot from a camera that starts out in the hall and passes over the lintel, keeping pace with Gryphon. :)

[1421] Added after the events of A Night to Remember, during the reconstruction of the upper floors.

[1487] One of my favorite moments of this story. It's a fun bonding moment. CC

[1550] Nick's smooth knows no bounds. CC

[1559] My favorite of our Doc Robbins lines; I can consistently hear Robert David Hall delivering it.

[1571] Never what you want to hear from your eccentric ME. I'm still terribly pleased with this scene, as I think it's a great example of Doc Robbins doing his Thing. CC

[1615] Developing this subplot was fun, in a frustrating way. There was a lot of reverse engineering of the chain of events, which led to a lot of digging holes for myself and then researching my way out of them. The best example being the drowning aspect and the differences between drowning in fresh water and in salt water. I think it both managed to be interesting and faithful to the source material. CC

[1670] I think the waiter's name ended up being that because I'd just seen the Hellboy movie.

[1728] Admittedly, Greg lives in a very small apartment.

[1740] An actual brand of fingerprint powder.

[1785] Now it can be told: That's Zoner's handprint. Its presence here is not significant.

[1883] As seen in Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic.

[2348] Alphonse Bertillon (1853-1914) actually invented the system that was supplanted by dactyloscopy, anthropometry - but he was, at least, an early proponent of biometric identification, of which dactyloscopy is one type, and one of the fathers of modern forensic science. Besides that, Sara went to high school on Salusia, where presumably any such reference would've been to the Salusian inventor of fingerprinting - but she's probably translating the remark into terms she figures Catherine, being human, will be more familiar with. (If so, Sir Francis Galton might've been a better choice than Bertillon, but cut her some slack, it's been a long day.)

[2412] Greg won this bet, though the matter apparently went no further.

[2465] This little bit is a great example of gags that filter out of us banging stuff around in the studio. And it's always fun to let Grissom really be Grissom. CC

[2478] And this from a man who once feared he was going deaf.

[2504] But it's just not the same.

[2592] One of the downsides of working in UF: remembering that it's The Future and odds are there are magical cures for the things that plague us now. Luckily it can be easy enough to work around. CC

[2610] This may in fact be true, but in point of fact, Barbara learned more about police work and forensic jiggery-pokery from her time as part of the Bat-crew than in any class.

[2662] A medical detail I actually learned back in film school during a conference about set safety, bolstered with more up-to-date research. CC

[2702] This gentleman is not supposed to be the Desmond Llewelyn Q character seen in so many James Bond films; he's based on the Armorer from the first Bond film, Doctor No. I guess they were supposed to be the same character, but they look and act differently enough for me to draw a distinction.

[2731] One wonders just how many members of Special Assignment 11 draw standard CID sidearms, but Major Boothroyd will have his little grumbles. (Actually, given that it's a good, compact weapon, the PPS wouldn't be a terrible choice for some in SA11.)

[2777] I leave it up to the reader's imagination whether Sara's hat has holes in the top.

[2814] Mythbusters, of course, there as here.

[3052] Those of you who enjoy cheesy movies may recognize Judge Olmeyer; he was a cadet in the Judge Dredd movie. His first name here is derived from that of the actor who played him in the movie, Balthazar Getty.

[3080] The Lawgiver-C is based off of Will Smith's sidearm in I, Robot, which I was working on at the time we were writing this. I noticed it at work and mentioned to Gryph the fact that, man, it looked like a compact Lawgiver. My only trouble, once we decided to adopt it, is that the only references I had for it were work-related and thus covered by my NDA. I'd resigned myself to just having the concept and waiting for the movie to come out for us to work out imagery, but before we released this story 20th Century Fox was nice enough to post an image on the movie website, resolving my dilemma. CC

[3123] Senior Judges (like Dredd) wear a gold eagle in place of one of the standard pauldrons on their street armor. The right to wear the eagle can be earned through valor, investigative skill, or time on the job.

[3148] Even in the forensics field, most people assume SLFG has some insanely complicated chemical name from which the initials are derived. Actually, the marketing people at the company that makes it rather threw up their hands in despair when trying to name it. "SLFG" actually stands for "Stuff that Lifts Fingerprints Good".

[3203] Yeah, I just wanted to let Vision out to play. So what? CC

[3278] Real Genius.

[3340] Lawgivers have a standard failsafe feature - if picked up by anyone other than an authorized user, they discharge a lethal electrical charge. Since the only people on Zardon dumb enough to grab a Judge's weapon without authorization tend to be perps, this is in keeping with the usual rough standard of Zardon justice.

[3463] A rare glimpse in flashback of what Sara looked like before she moved to New Avalon - and an interesting challenge for the artist, if this were an illustrated medium, but alas, it is not.

[3684] Vincent is an original character. In a movie, he could be played by, oh, I dunno, say the young Dirk Benedict.

[3765] Salusian primary ears are very sensitive to touch - they almost function as tactile organs as much as sound receptors, easily detecting air currents and changes in temperature.

[3804] It's in the observation room by Interrogation.

[3826] Avalon Chopper.

[3884] On the actual television show, they were paragliders.

[3914] As seen in Rite of Passage.

[4012] A playful jab at the TV show, where it sometimes seems like they only ever have conferences in the hall.

[4248] Sometimes so cheerfully, and so enthusiastically, that the galaxy at large now assumes those things to be Salusian in origin (e.g. ice cream).

[4299] Shows you what Vincent knows. The full weight of his empire? If this plan had succeeded, he'd have eliminated the members of the strike team personally. They're Salusian, after all, and that is kanly. Being traditionalists, the Swordsmen ought to be able to appreciate the irony in that.

[4357] The ultimate indignity for a night-shift CSI: murdered on the job, and then processed by Ecklie.

[4401] The Transformers Energon version of Hot Shot is carefully non-specific, as most of Hasbro's car designs (the licensed movie ones notwithstanding) are these days, but it most closely resembles a modern Aston Martin.

[4424] As not seen in the unproduced CSI: New Avalon episode "Who Shot Wheeljack?"

[4456] Yes, actually, but Hot Shot's ready to step in if need be. He doesn't want to hit a bridge abutment any more than his passengers do, after all.

[4615] Once again Grissom didn't have to draw...

[4757] Lu and the other women who more or less stand watch on the Chief's personal life generally approve of Sara. They consider her pleasingly genuine compared to a lot of the people who cross his path in the course of things, and they like that she's a scientist, not some kind of cyborg supercommando or something. In most of their opinions, it's about time he started hanging around with normal people occasionally.

[4862] Mornington Crescent is named after the London Tube station and, by association, the game played on the BBC Radio program I'm Sorry I Haven't a Clue. The joke (which the club's management had in mind) is that all journeys in said game end at Mornington Crescent.

[4868] Tut, tut, Gil. It's an English-themed establishment. It's the billiard room.

[4907] Catherine is IPO AEGIS operative Imra Ardeen's father's sister.

[4927] The Madness of Jetanam V is a popular stage comedy back on Salusia.

[4961] Presumably in reference to the 20th-century Earth billiards notable Rudolph "Minnesota Fats" Wanderome, Jr., or possibly Jackie Gleason's character from The Hustler (1961).

[5012] I enjoyed using the slightly unusual mechanism of their pool-playing styles to contrast Catherine's character with Sara's - and I love the way Sara approaches the game.

[5037] Like all good science nerds, Sara had seen Ghostbusters long before meeting Gryphon.

[5150] Why wouldn't Grissom go along? It's a scientific evalution!

[5158] Apparently this jukebox has one of those psychic interface chips I'm convinced Apple puts in iPods.

[5215] The late Knight Saber Linna Yamazaki was a member of the same family that founded the Yamazaki Motor Company of New Japan.

[5236] Which must have amused Barbara considerably, since before leaving Kane's to attend college, she was Batgirl.

[5265] Hot Shot is probably proposing that they cable up a smartcar link and go drive really fast around Highway 29, not asking, "HEY BABE WANNA CYB3R??" - although I suppose, to an Autobot, it might be the same thing.

[5340] They're actually Utena Tenjou's.

[5366] And he is the snuggliest of hounds, too.


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  RE: CSI 102/103: Parallel Lines Moonsword Feb-05-08 4
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1. "RE: CSI 102/103: Parallel Lines"
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   ><784> Girls with guns kicking ass with science. Just doesn't get any better than > that. CC

Amen.

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   > <2702> This gentleman is not supposed to be the Desmond Llewelyn
> Q character seen in so many James Bond films; he's based on the
> Armorer from the first Bond film, Doctor No. I guess they were
> supposed to be the same character, but they look and act differently
> enough for me to draw a distinction.

Thats really interesting, G. Personally Llewelyn's so ingrained into my mind as Q I simply cant seem to visually anyone else ever having the job.

Talk about typecasting, eh?


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3. "RE: CSI 102/103: Parallel Lines"
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   > [434] It involved seeing how long it would take a pig to rot.

I would have thought the Mythbusters team could have provided that information. :)

> [1381] Cheltaria (color, 2401) is a Salusian "historical epic" film based on an ancient epic poem. It tells the story of the mythical warrior queen Cheltaria, who unified the various tribes of Salusia at the dawn of that planet's civilization and led the revolt that overthrew the Padishah overlords who ruled the planet at the time. The movie is sort of the Salusian equivalent of Ben-Hur or The Longest Day.

If I may toot my own horn a bit here: eyrie.net/UF/FI/SOS/GFX/rm-cheltaria.gif

> [1785] Now it can be told: That's Zoner's handprint. Its presence here is not significant.

I had it figured as Hammer's, given he's the really tall guy. But it's far from the first time I've been wrong. :)

> [3463] A rare glimpse in flashback of what Sara looked like before she moved to New Avalon - and an interesting challenge for the artist, if this were an illustrated medium, but alas, it is not.

I'd love to give it a try, but my attempts at drawing real people anime-style have been uniformly disastrous. Best not to tempt fate, lest I rouse the ire of Sara fans.

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4. "RE: CSI 102/103: Parallel Lines"
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   Looking back at this with the annotations open and after reading Outward Trajectory, something just occurred to me.

2815: Exactly where Grissom had gotten to know them, Warrick wasn't
sure, but he knew that they went back some way with his boss.

Does Grissom's acquaintance with Jamie go back to his time and training as a Jedi?


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5. "RE: CSI 102/103: Parallel Lines"
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   >2815: Exactly where Grissom had gotten to know them, Warrick
>wasn't
>sure, but he knew that they went back some way with his boss.
>
>Does Grissom's acquaintance with Jamie go back to his time and
>training as a Jedi?

It's entirely possible (though given the difference in their ages, Grissom being Salusian, it would've been Jamie's training), but then again, they've both had such varying careers that it's also possible that their both being Jedi is just a coincidence. They might, for instance, have crossed paths professionally when Jamie ran the Trace Evidence lab in Aldera and Grissom was a member of the Royal Salusian Mounted Police's Evidence Response Unit.

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   <1670> I think the waiter's name ended up being that because I'd just seen the Hellboy movie.

It was. The original draft, I remember reading and snickering about, actually had him being 'Guillermo Del Toro'.

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