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41. "RE: minor revision"
In response to message #40
 
   >I have adjusted the dialogue in the last scene, where Hannelore visits
>Gryphon to request his counsel regarding the letter she received from
>Fritz, to reflect developments in Gallian Gothic. This was
>surprisingly tricky to do for such a small edit, since I had to
>preserve the feeling of melancholy while simultaneously injecting a
>note of good news, but overall I think it works. It may even have
>lifted Hannelore's spirits a little and given her some hope that she
>could make her situation work after all.

I'm not a professional writer, mind you, but I think it works very well. Perhaps the fact that I'm not sure I'd have realized how difficult it was is proof of how good you've gotten at this.


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 (OWaW 15) D Plus 21,914 [View All] Gryphonadmin Jun-06-15 TOP
   RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Matrix Dragon Jun-06-15 1
   RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Terminus Est Jun-06-15 2
      RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 TsukaiStarburst Jun-06-15 3
          RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 BZArchermoderator Jun-06-15 4
              RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Proginoskes Jun-06-15 5
                  RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Gryphonadmin Jun-06-15 7
      RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Gryphonadmin Jun-06-15 8
          RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Terminus Est Jun-07-15 14
              RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Droken Jun-07-15 15
   RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Nova Floresca Jun-06-15 6
      RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Gryphonadmin Jun-06-15 9
          RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Droken Jun-06-15 10
              RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Gryphonadmin Jun-06-15 11
          RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 Offsides Jun-06-15 12
      RE: (OWaW) D Plus 21,914 CdrMike Jun-06-15 13
   We have an extremely serious problem. The Traitor Jun-07-15 16
      RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Matrix Dragon Jun-07-15 17
          RE: We have an extremely serious problem. The Traitor Jun-07-15 18
              RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Verbena Jun-07-15 19
                  RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Matrix Dragon Jun-07-15 20
                  RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Gryphonadmin Jun-07-15 25
                      RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Verbena Jun-07-15 31
                          RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Gryphonadmin Jun-08-15 32
                              RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Verbena Jun-08-15 33
                                  RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Gryphonadmin Jun-08-15 34
                              RE: We have an extremely serious problem. CdrMike Jun-08-15 36
                                  RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Gryphonadmin Jun-08-15 37
                                  RE: We have an extremely serious problem. TsukaiStarburst Jun-08-15 38
                                      RE: We have an extremely serious problem. CdrMike Jun-08-15 39
              RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Gryphonadmin Jun-07-15 28
                  RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Verbena Jun-07-15 30
      RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Gryphonadmin Jun-07-15 21
          RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Droken Jun-07-15 22
              RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Gryphonadmin Jun-07-15 24
                  RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Terminus Est Jun-07-15 26
                      RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Star Ranger4 Jun-07-15 27
                          RE: We have an extremely serious problem. Matrix Dragon Jun-07-15 29
          RE: We have an extremely serious problem. TsukaiStarburst Jun-07-15 23
              RE: We have an extremely serious problem. gamlain Jun-08-15 35
   minor revision Gryphonadmin Sep-19-20 40
     RE: minor revision Verbena Sep-19-20 41


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