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Zemyla
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1. "RE: OWaW 21a: A Day at Crone Rock"
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Don't take this the wrong way, but I hope Gryph never learns to fly. At least not here.

First off, "the crazy guy in the jetpack" is who he is, at least here. That's who he was on his first trip, and since then, he's become "the crazy guy in the jetpack with strange metamagical knowledge who's also marrying a vampire", which is a good development broadening his core competencies. But as soon as he can tell gravity to sod off for more than a few seconds at a time, it feels like it's over.

Second, he, perhaps even more so than Corwin, feels associated with the element of earth. He's very much a grounded person, and every form of flight he's done, from Eight-Ball One to Captain of the Challenger, has been the product of mortal ingenuity.

Third, the ability to fly with the Force must be really rare, or else we'd have heard about it more; Jedi and Sith would fly rather than juat taking massive leaps and running on walls. Even the majority of witches rely on Strikers to fly. And I suspect that the majority of Force power in that regard is used to keep his jetpack from killing him the way it killed nearly everyone, man or witch, who tested it before. I mean, probably the only "normal" who could use it in combat is Kozue, because flying is her thing.

Basically, Gryphon works in this story because he's not just a "male witch", and so he can exert influence on the world in a way that's different from the witches. He's making it a place that will be better even when he's not around.

Now I'm not saying you shouldn't have introduced this plot thread, because it can lead to very interesting places, like why are Reimu and Alice and Marisa such prodigies, how this power manifests in lesser ways such as temporary gravity interdiction in other witches, and other plot twists that I can't even think of right now. But I feel like the story will be best served by him trying and failing.

EDIT: I feel like I should talk about the other things in it, too. Reimu and Marisa is an uncommon but not unheard-of pairing, and you pull it off well. Shanghai was just adorable. And it'd definitely be interesting for Marisa to meet Witolda and find out she's not the only witch whose familiar is a physical animal.


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