Well, you know, why change what works? :)

>At least she's not hitting on him this time.

Like she says, there are some things she prefers not to do with her mother watching.

>While contemplating Azula's potential fashion choices when given
>options that didn't include ridiculously puffy pants or pointy shoes,
>I came to the conclusion that at some point, she would
>definitely have earned a Corellian Bloodstripe if for no other
>reason than to look boss.

She's certainly been in the right line of work for it. Plenty of opportunities.

>More probably, Katara assumed that Azula never really left Team
>Burninate, but is too polite to say so while still sort of hung over.
>:)

She'd have been told that Azula turned down Beria's first job offer, at least.

>I also choose to believe that Sokka toyed heavily with the idea of
>cashing in his return ticket to Diqiu just to fuck with people. Do a
>bunch of book signings, maybe try and get his acting career going
>again, pose for selfies on top of the graves of his enemies, that kind
>of thing. Publish some of the stuff he's written while in Asgard, like
>his completely unauthorized biography of Avatar Kyoshi.
>
>Decided against it when he couldn't talk Toph into coming along.

... you say all that as though the matter were permanently settled. :)

>All of this. God damn, do I want to see Azula and Ty Lee tool around
>the galaxy being awesome girlfriends together[, etc.]

I can't make any specific warranty about any particular bit of your wish list there, but it's pretty likely you will see the above, and entirely possible that one or more of the detail items will be involved.

>And I like how it is established that Katara is just going to be
>wierdsies about Azula for awhile. I know you'll likely resent the
>comparison, but it makes sense in context of both her treatment of
>Zuko prior to The Southern Raiders

I don't think I'd have a lot of latitude to resent that part, since my picture of Katara and the parts of her psyche relevant to what's going on in this scene is largely informed by her attitude toward Zuko before, during, and after that episode (and the way she conducted herself generally in the course of the incident).

>There's a lot of elision going on in there, I feel. Some of it is
>necessary, but a lot of this felt very telly, rather than showy.

I'm... not sure I see how it could be otherwise, given that it deals primarily with what's going on inside one of the characters' heads. It's like Edison says about telepathic combat in Get Carter - it'll never catch on as an action movie trope because it doesn't look like anything on film.

>In
>particular that long digression into Katara's internal mental state
>and motivations doesn't scan particularly smoothly for me. I realize
>this is a vignette rather than a novelette, but... I dunno.

This is a little ironic, given that the main reason this bit is here is because of the thought process you put in motion* by saying you didn't think Tyrants gave Katara's internal mental state and motivations enough play.

(Also, three paragraphs, one of them a single sentence, is a "long digression"? Tough room. :)

>I don't think it's quite up to the standard
>of demonstrating a persons internal conflict, nature, and evolution we
>saw most recently in just about everything involve Azana and Karana.

Well... that's probably true. I prefer to see it as evidence of A Bride Too Far's unusual strength rather than any particular weakness in Armistice Day, though. The former was a real lightning-in-a-bottle moment, one of those rare and crackly times when the thing basically writes itself. This piece, well, I'm happy with it and (if I do say) I think it has some great moments and nicely turned phrases in it. I'm particularly pleased with, "You've seen what happens when I take life too seriously." It's satisfactory and it needs to be here, but it's not a product of epiphany; rather an attempt to further articulate things already in play.

>Still, a good time was had by all.

Well, that's good.

As an aside, a similar background thought process came to fruition yesterday, in regard to another gap in Desolation Angel I've been mulling over since you pointed it out. The result of that one will probably be coming to a board near you sometime this evening. It's a bit of an experiment, but then I'm feeling a bit experimental.

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