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10. "RE: All Those Stars: A Mini-Story"
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Loved it. one quibble.

She gave birth in two hours? Without DJ shifting around her legs, messing with the afterbirth, and everything? I know it kinda kills the DJ centric viewpoint, but (a) that's a really damn short time, unless asuka was seriously dialated and sucking up the contractions - and (b)in order for that to hold true her water would have broke some time before without DJ noticing. Not impossible, just kinda unusual. He's a pretty with it sort of guy - I thought he would have figured something out.

just my two cents - I've3 only been in on a couple births, but they all seemed kinda prolonged and messy to me.

cheers,
c.


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