(I'd suggest that you try for a gig with the big guys, but then there'd be line editors and--worse--Suits breathing down your neck... it's probably better this way, with total creative control and no deadlines to meet.)

Specific bits:

At first, my thought was "What's the final version of the IM armor going to be?" Then it hit me that that was silly--Iron Man isn't a goal, it's a process. Onward and upward.

No matter how hard I try, I can't visualize Nene as anything but the Sonoda version. Especially with all the crossing-guard jokes. (And I want to call her "pre-Crisis Nene," but that really doesn't work. :) )

And one question remains... the Great Unanswered... are this Ben and Zoner native to this BGC world, or not...? So far, there's no hard evidence either way, and it isn't even necessarily germane to the plot... *shrugs* I suppose you'll let us in on that eventually. No rush.

--The Evil Midnight Lurker what Lurks at Midnight
"An object at rest--CANNOT BE STOPPED!!!"