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Gryphon
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Sep-15-20, 04:59 PM (EST) |
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13. "RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus"
In response to message #11
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>>Also, while it works as a cold open, its really confusing as to how >>this scene fits in with what follows. > >Hmm... yeah, I can see that. Making the omnibus edition did kind of >break the flow in a few places, in much the same way that editing >together episodes of a TV series into a "movie" doesn't always work. >Maybe I should take that piece and move it into the jump that was left >for it in the original version and see how that works. So, I had a go at that, rearranging that bit of the omnibus so that the scenes go in order instead of having a misplaced IMR-flash-forward cold open in the middle of everything. I had to write a couple of transition paragraphs to make it flow properly, but I think it works reasonably well. See what y'all think. --G. -><- Benjamin D. Hutchins, Co-Founder, Editor-in-Chief, & Forum Mod Eyrie Productions, Unlimited http://www.eyrie-productions.com/ zgryphon at that email service Google has Ceterum censeo Carthaginem esse delendam. |
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