19. "RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus"
In response to message #13
> >So, I had a go at that, rearranging that bit of the omnibus so that >the scenes go in order instead of having a misplaced IMR-flash-forward >cold open in the middle of everything. I had to write a couple of >transition paragraphs to make it flow properly, but I think it works >reasonably well. See what y'all think. > >--G.
Well, I can't speak for the others, but it does flow much better to myself; especially since it makes it a lot clearer that the reason UF-G is kinda examining the stars so... umm... wheezely is cause Flandre just rang his bell. Too bad for Flandre that that just kind of gets UF-G, like Utena, to level up!
Of COURSE you wernt expecting it! No One expects the FANNISH INQUISITION! RCW# 86