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19. "RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus"
In response to message #13
 
   >
>So, I had a go at that, rearranging that bit of the omnibus so that
>the scenes go in order instead of having a misplaced IMR-flash-forward
>cold open in the middle of everything. I had to write a couple of
>transition paragraphs to make it flow properly, but I think it works
>reasonably well. See what y'all think.
>
>--G.

Well, I can't speak for the others, but it does flow much better to myself; especially since it makes it a lot clearer that the reason UF-G is kinda examining the stars so... umm... wheezely is cause Flandre just rang his bell. Too bad for Flandre that that just kind of gets UF-G, like Utena, to level up!

Of COURSE you wernt
expecting it!
No One expects the
FANNISH INQUISITION!

RCW# 86


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   RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Sofaspud Sep-09-20 1
      RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Gryphonadmin Sep-09-20 2
          RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus zwol Sep-10-20 3
              RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Gryphonadmin Sep-10-20 4
                  RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Peter Eng Sep-10-20 5
                      RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Gryphonadmin Sep-10-20 6
                          RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Gryphonadmin Sep-10-20 7
          RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Sofaspud Sep-15-20 17
   RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Star Ranger4 Sep-15-20 8
      RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Astynax Sep-15-20 9
          RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Gryphonadmin Sep-15-20 12
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                          RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Gryphonadmin Sep-16-20 20
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                                  RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Sofaspud Sep-16-20 22
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                                          RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Sofaspud Sep-16-20 25
                                              RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Gryphonadmin Sep-16-20 26
      RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Peter Eng Sep-15-20 10
      RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Gryphonadmin Sep-15-20 11
          RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Gryphonadmin Sep-15-20 13
             RE: Thicker Than Water Omnibus Star Ranger4 Sep-16-20 19
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