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"Omnibus 4!"
 
   Very nice - I really liked "Mr. Midshipman Tenjou: For the Good of the Service", it's a very Utena-ish thing to do. But I found the early breaks in the story without any real visual break to be rather difficult to follow. May I request a minor formatting change to make it a little clearer (such as an extra blank line)?

Other than that, jolly good show!

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